A poem I made

[underlilith]

Ok, here's the "poem" (if you could call it that) I made.... It was after a very... influential... event.... hope you enjoy it and if not, i'm not afraid of critisism.

I am fire
I am love, I am hate
I am fire
I am passion, I am vengeance
I am fire
I am lust, I am desire
I am fire
I am strength, I am will
I am fire
I am the spark, I am uncontrolled
I am fire

Hope you enjoyed it... comments are welcome!

[My Psionic Nature]

I love the repetitive structure of the poem, very good! =D>

I love the expression of rawness of emotions.

[Mahala]

Sounds like a prayer, to invoke the essence of one's inner fire... kudos, it's good!

[raventears]

i like it its good =D>

[Kystar]

Wow, that's cool. It reminded me of my fire riddle. Nice work.


And in case anyone cares:

I leap.
I twist.
I turn.
I run.
I laugh.
I sigh.
I die.

What am I?

[eugeneli]

I have to I like it a lot! But my taste runs a little more the romantic side, I hope you like it.

The game of love it is said
hold a hand and warm the head
and if it be to a lovers bed
or sit and wait for the next word said

In a tender and an infinite sigh
and catching of a wanting eye
to have or hold a simmering gaze
and wander through loves sweet maze

In a tangled webb of truthful lies
or a look so soft in anothers eyes
will have your heart flying on high
and bring you to heavens blissful side

And though you try to understand
the love you feel in your two hands
the doubt in mind can bring sweet tears
but truth at end removes all fears

And in the end when you can dare
to trust your eyes and heart and ears
and in the others burning heart
it is from then you find you will never part!

[Max]

Thank you Underlilith and Eugeneli I love reading poetry from the emotions x